Amy R. (brightknightie) wrote,
Amy R.
brightknightie

2011 Yuletide FK Stories Reviewed

This year's Yuletide scored two Forever Knight stories. Unusually for me — eternally behind on my fanfic reading — I jumped my own queue, downloaded the AO3 mobi files to my Kindle, and have read them while they're still anonymous. I enjoyed both in very different ways.

My remarks below contain spoilers! The ratings and warnings/tags in these reviews are mine as a reader, not those of the authors. Finally, please understand that, writing here in my own journal about [currently] anonymous stories, these are indeed actual, old-fashioned reviews, not comments nor recommendations. That is, they frankly consider both good and bad elements as I have fun musing and analyzing. (If you prefer to avoid negative opinions, please skip this post!)

"The Cross" (PG, Gen, ~1K words)
Characters: Lacroix, OMC
Warnings/Tags: Historical, Early Middle Ages, Vampire Violence, Mob Violence, Murder

"The Cross" addresses questions of Lacroix's name: why this name, and why so consistently and persistently.

Early in second season ("A Fate Worse Than Death"), we learn that the character went by Lacroix at least as early as c.1070-1100, and then late in that season ("A More Permanent Hell") that he had been a Pompeian Roman named Lucius (not, interestingly, a name etymologically related to the Lucien established for both c.1229 and the present day in "Be My Valentine," which aired earlier than AMPH in second season). Yet long before those episodes, of course, when no canon existed on Lacroix's age or origin beyond his claims in the "Dark Knight"/"Second Chapter" flashbacks (Ghengis Kahn, Charlemagne, Nero), people speculated about so symbolic a name (he's Nick's cross to bear, etc.). I remember one story, written during the hiatus between first and second seasons, in which Lacroix witnessed the Crucifixion of Jesus Christ and consequently adopted the name "The Cross;" I imagine that there were more stories of that trope, especially before second season laid down the canon. Of course there were uncounted crucifixions of ordinary people through too much history, not just by Romans, and there is many a meaning for the word "cross," but there's really only the one meaning in English when the word is a proper noun. (By the way, in the scripts I've been privileged to see over the years, when other characters address him in dialogue, the capitalization is "Lacroix," not "LaCroix.")

This story's Lacroix, injured, takes refuge with a hermit clever enough to nurse his patient without getting drained. Nursing and cleverness together spawn friendship, as the story perceptively finesses Lacroix's canonical obsession with suitable companions ("What I've always wanted: companionship." —AMPH) into an early attempt at making a Nick (or a Janette). Appropriately at the nexus of companionship and names, the story glancingly invokes Divia by giving this Lacroix a fuller name, from which his daughter's name derives. The attempted conversion fails, a la "Near Death" (another second-season ep), when the hermit chooses the door to the Light. Neatly, Lacroix's failure to convert the hermit to vampirism parallels the hermit's failure to convert Lacroix to Christianity. Following the unexpected, unwanted loss of this valued friend, Lacroix takes this name forever.

But why, precisely, does Lacroix take this name? Is it to honor the hermit's beliefs? Or to mock them? Or as flagellation for his own failure? What was so intensely powerful about this friendship that he takes this name for all eternity? Is there something about this hermit that we should know; is he a historical figure, perhaps? "The Cross" does not bring us — or, at any rate, me — in on that. Respect and love would fill in the blank for any ordinary person, but... canon's Lacroix is hardly ordinary. His reaction to even the suggestion that someone would defy him, would reject his invitation into the night, is incredulity, anger, injured pride (cf. ND). Only the imminent end of the world drags out of him acknowledgment of divinity ("What kind of god is it that can create such perversity...?" —AMPH). "The Cross" obliges us to reason backward from the persistence of the name in canon to the importance of the hermit in this story.

This very short story takes a detached, omniscient perspective, moving unobstructed from one character to another like a documentary camera, inside yet ever outside. This brisk reportage enables a lot of action in the small space, and its swift plottiness can be very engaging. However, it slides readily into more telling than showing. Some readers may find the detachment welcome, allowing them the more easily to accept the story as compatible with their own interpretation of Lacroix. Others, hoping to be guided to a new understanding of Lacroix, may find eliding the emotions of the climax and the motivation of the name dissatisfying.

Overall, the piece is entirely readable, the tidy parallel between the two failed conversion attempts pleasing, and the effort to address the mystery of Lacroix's name worthwhile.

"A Dark and Stormy Night" (PG, Gen, ~9K words)
Characters: Nick, Tracy, Barbara, Natalie, Sydney
Warnings/Tags: Weather, Hurricane, Flooding, Policework, Homicide, Alcoholism, Family, Flashbacks, Historical, 1950s

"A Dark and Stormy Night" could almost have been a third-season episode — almost, if ever third-season would have dared an episode with no Lacroix and no Raven, if the crew could somehow have used historical news footage in place of special effects they could never have afforded, and if a murder investigation would have been left with the murderer unknown, to be pursued further another day (realistic, yes; episode-like, no). There's a firm grasp of canon here, but there's also a comfortable evasion of third season's avalanche of doom; this is clearly the dignity of late third season, not the sleaziness of early third, but the atmosphere of diligence, cooperation and possibility recalls second or even first.

The cop plot concerns a body found on the banks of the Humber river during a storm warning reminiscent of the flashbacks, which relate Hurricane Hazel, a real 1954 disaster in Toronto, and posit a Nick returned to Toronto, motivated by what happened to his friends the Barringtons in the "Forward into the Past" flashbacks, after being displaced from Chicago by the events of the "Spin Doctor" flashbacks. The personal plot is Tracy's, trying, conflictedly, to take care of her needy, alcoholic mother without shirking her work, and Barbara Vetter is, unusually but surprisingly smoothly, the knot at the center of the story, tying together the storm, flashback and character elements. Barbara, still terrified of storms as a grown woman because of childhood trauma during Hurricane Hazel, turns out to be the little girl Nick rescued during the flashbacks; Natalie caring for a storm-shy Sydney when she needs to get to work provides a miniature parallel to Tracy's challenges with her mother.

"A Dark and Stormy Night" renders its outdoor sets and geography vividly, especially the ravine in the rainy night. The story's notes and a quick glance at Wikipedia suggest high historical accuracy, making the Hurricane Hazel references a fair chance for the reader to learn something new. However, the fidelity to reality seems almost to paralyze Nick in the flashbacks. This Nick watches, and waits, and then watches and waits some more. (In FK, it's usually Lacroix who watches and waits!) Of course it would be under the table, so to speak, to take the real-life heroics of the real human men and women of that night and bestow them on fictional vampire Nick, but, still, having Nick observe them without acting himself is disconcerting; it feels a bit out of character, or perhaps like Nick at his indecisive worst. His active, "shoe leather" detective work in the present day further contrasts his flashback bystanding.

Tracy is the character-development winner in this story. Both Nick and Natalie occupy large chunks of "A Dark and Stormy Night," equal to or greater than Tracy's, and they score points doing their jobs well, but neither overcomes any significant obstacles, learns any lessons, or earns any developmental payoff. They end the story where they began it. Tracy, on the other hand, grapples with her frustrations with her mother, and moves from being present but terse and burdened, to generously stretching her imagination and increasing her understanding of something that was there to be understood all her life, but which she wasn't ready to see (perhaps until she was an adult and could see her mother's vulnerabilities differently; perhaps until Vachon "opened her eyes" —AtA). Because all the story payoff is Tracy's, some readers may feel that the story could balance a little better by increasing the percentage of the story focused on Tracy, or perhaps instead that Nick could muster some payoff of his own in the flashbacks by coming to a realization about Toronto, or human fragility, or nature's fury, or the solidarity of living (and undead)... and then using that realization in the present, somehow.

(The story suffers three typos, if I remember and observed correctly, in the form of missing little words (e.g. "in"); I'm sorry I didn't think to mark them at the time. Really, though, in a ~9K words story, that's not to be blinked at. Formatting-wise, I wasn't wild about the choice to designate flashbacks by italicized blockquotes, and not only because they came slightly mangled — apparently, there's an upper limit to text indenting via blockquote in mobi on Kindle (don't know which is at fault), and these passages all exceeded it. It's a very personal reaction, obviously, that my brain kept wanting to process the blockquotes as quotations, which is not what they are here. No big deal, just: "Note to Self: Use other methods for flashbacks!")

I have many preferences in common with the recipient for whom this story was crafted. We both like gen, canonicity, strong Nick and policework. On top of that, this story offers history, too, which I love. To that extent, this could have been written for me as easily as her, and I enjoyed the reading of the first third or so enormously! After that, my delight tapered, as I waited for this Nick to make a move, and slowly realized that this Tracy was where my attention belonged. Once I got my head wrapped around the Tracy dimension, and saw the parallels — I have great fun recognizing parallel constructions and making connections — I was content, but the dawning disappointment that it was not really a Nick story, for all his presence, and that the murder would not be solved, created a drag on my personal reading reaction.

[Addendum: I agonize about "payoff" for the reader when writing fanfiction. Goodness knows, I hit the mark less than I'd like! I often think that romance stories have it much easier than gen stories in generating "payoff." After all, in romance, emotional resonance and release may almost always come in fundamentally the same way: bringing the couple together (or keeping them apart). In gen, a new mechanism — indeed, a new target! — must be invented every time. No one accuses a 'shipper of redundancy for writing yet another story uniting her preferred couple, but a gen writer who repeatedly cures Nick, for example, may well be found tedious.]

Overall, the ride of this story is great — compellingly paced and reminiscent of canon — but the final destination may ring hollow for some readers. Hopefully, if you go in expecting a Tracy payoff rather than a Nick or Natalie payoff, you'll avoid my detours and arrive satisfied.

Comments on Dreamwidth: comment count unavailable
Tags: character:foreverknight:lacroix, character:foreverknight:nick, character:foreverknight:tracy, fanfic:who:byyou, fest:yuletide, ficathons&fests
Subscribe
  • Post a new comment

    Error

    default userpic

    Your reply will be screened

    Your IP address will be recorded 

    When you submit the form an invisible reCAPTCHA check will be performed.
    You must follow the Privacy Policy and Google Terms of use.
  • 3 comments